Does this Australian workplace message sound too blunt?

A software team is writing a routine project update for colleagues in Australia. The draft is grammatically correct, but the team wants a native speaker's judgment on tone, especially whether its requests sound abrupt or overly formal.

1Review the supplied workplace message and identify phrases that sound unnatural, too blunt, or unnecessarily formal in Australian English. Offer a natural alternative for each and briefly explain the tone difference. Return up to six paired examples, followed by an overall verdict, in 100–180 words.

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